徐小平

范例2.1 提要

申请者概况

大学毕业，在政府的交通主管部门工作六七年， 有比较丰富的工作经验获得了著名的宾夕法尼亚大学的硕士录取，没有奖学金，全自费，一年三万八千美元

拒签理由

钱太多，将给家庭造成极大困境花钱太多，你就不会回来（要在美国挣回这个钱）

申诉重点

宾大是一个著名的大学，这个学位也是独特的学位, 在世界上很有名气，非常值得花这笔钱钱确实非常多，但值得投资因为学校的名气和项目的名气，学完后对自己有价值百万的前途强调自己的明确的学习目的：学成回国赚钱进一步论证自己为什么回来：在国内的地位，经济能力，老公的地位但宾大学历依然是要的，因为这个学历将给我无与伦比的竞争优势，无限美好的事业前景


范例2.1 原文

Dear Visa Officer:

My application for a student visa was rejected by your officer. The reason was, according to the visa officer who rejected me "(because that I will spend $38,000 at University of Pennsylvania) I believe that your parents will live under great pressure, I believe your study in America will not be easy, and I believe you will not come back."

I have to say that the visa officer at the interview was very nice to me even though he did reject my visa application. I understand and appreciate the visa officer’s consideration to my situation, however, I do believe that the visa officer had not considered my whole background of my application before he brought up his above three concerns. Therefore I would like to file this argument and hope you can give me a second chance.

1. The school that gave me the admission is NO ordinary school. It is the University of Pennsylvania, an Ivy League school and only one out of ten international applicants was able to receive the honor of being admitted. However, the real and the most important reason for me to choose this school is not just because of its general reputation, but is for a very unique program that exactly fits into my professional and academic expertise.

With the worldwide distinction, the program at U. of Penn is "Transportation Systems and Multi-Model Transport Network". It studies the complexity of transportation systems and the method to organize the systems effectively. The aim of the program is to educate people for leadership roles in the transportation industry and government. In my case, what I am going to focus on my research and the graduate thesis in this program will be on the specific problems of Chinese TRANSPORTATION NET WORKS. The value of my study has a multi-billion dollar worth to China’s developing economy because transportation is such a messy business and so much studies need to be done to its huge problems.

The program will guarantee my greatest possible potential in my field of business. No investment is better than the investment into one’s education, particularly when it comes to University of Pennsylvania and when it comes to such a distinguished program! The money for the school is BIG, but the value of the program is BIGGER!

2. $38,000 is a lot of money and in fact, it could be the amount that an average Chinese worker can not earn in tens of years. However, it is also known that there are several million millionaires in China at this time. I am not a millionaire yet but a U of Penn degree will definitely help me in achieving that goal in a shortest possible time. My experience in my field and the prestigious from the U. of Penn background will guarantee my goal. I could afford the $38,000 dollars even though it is a big pressure to me and to my family. However, if $38,000 can guarantee you a great future, a future with million dollars, would you go ahead to invest on it ? YOU WOULD. I WOULD.

3. Having worked as the division manager (supervising 30 people) in China National & International Transportation Corporation (CNTRANS), China’s largest transportation company, I feel that an American degree will be a golden finger to my rich experience. And I WILL be successful to develop my own business back in China with a Degree from U of Penn. That is the only reason why I would spend so much money for this program. $38,000 is a big money to me and to my family, however, compare with the money future after the degree this investment is only a small down payment! Rich or poor, I do can afford it and I do want to invest it!

Why I bother to make so much effort for the whole thing? As a division manager at CNTRANS, I am making a very good living here and enjoying my own apartment, car privilege and many other corporate benefits. I have a beautiful family and my husband works in the same company and his status in the company is even higher than mine. Our life in China is very good it will be better particularly when I finish my U. of Penn’s unique program and return to China. Combining what I will have learned from the U of Penn’s program with my business contacts and experiences I have accumulated at SINOTRANS, my career will take a great leap forward in the transportation industry that I have committed six years of my youth. The program that will cost me $38,000 at the University of Pennsylvania will give me a competitive advantage that nobody else in China can possibly match.

Again, I know that your visa officer did not suspect my intention for study in the United States but worried about my money problem. This problem is not a problem because of the above statement. I sincerely hope that you will reconsider my situation and grant the student visa for me to attend the University of Pennsylvania in the United States.

Your consideration and time are greatly appreciated.

Sincerely,

　

范例2.3 翻译

尊敬的签证官：

我的学生签证申请被你们拒签。理由是，根据拒绝我的签证官："（由于我需要在美国的宾夕法尼亚大学花费三万八千美元）我相信你的父母将处于巨大的压力之下，我相信你在美国的日子也不会好过，我相信你将不会回来"。

我必须说在面试的时候这位签证官对我还是非常善良的，尽管他最终拒绝了我的签证申请。 我理解并且感谢这位签证官对我的情况的考虑，但是，我还相信的是，在这位签证官提出他的上述三个担忧时，并没有考虑到我的全面的情况。因此我愿在这里呈上我的解释并希望你能够给我第二次机会。

1· 给予我录取的美国大学，不是一般的学校。这是宾夕法尼亚大学，一个常春藤大学，十个外国申请者里面只有一个人能够得到被她录取的荣耀。更有甚者，对于我来说，选择这个学校的真正的和最重要的原因还不是这个大学的名气，而是因为这个大学有一个独一无二的项目，天衣无缝地符合我的学术和专业专长。

在全世界非常著名，宾夕法尼亚大学的这个项目叫做："运输系统和多模式运输网络"。它研究的是运输系统的复杂性和最有效组织这个复杂系统的方法。这个项目的目标是，为运输领域里的企业和政府负责人提供领导能力培训。就我来说，我要在这个项目里做的研究以及毕业论文，将集中于中国运输网络所面临的具体问题。我将去做的研究，对于中国发展中的经济具有亿万美元的价值，这是因为运输系统在中国是如此的混乱，需要太多的研究来解决它那惊人的困境。

这个项目将保证我在我的工作领域里面拥有最伟大的前景。世界上最好的投资，莫过于对于教育的投资，尤其当这个投资投向宾夕法尼亚大学，尤其是当这个投资投向这样一个著名的项目！给学校的钱数目确实很大，但这个项目的价值却更大！

2· 三万八千美元是有点太多,事实上，这个数目可能是许多普通中国人十年也挣不出来的。 但是，人们也知道当今的中国有数百万个百万富翁。我还不是一个百万富翁但是宾夕法尼亚的学位将一定能帮助我在尽可能短的时间内实现这个目标。我的工作经历和宾大的学历将能保证我实现这个目标。我毕竟是能够出得起三万八千美元的，尽管这对我自己和家庭确实带来巨大的压力。然而如果三万八千美元能够保证你的一个伟大前程，一个百万美元的前程，你会不会毅然投入这笔钱？你会。我会。

3· 作为中国最大的运输公司，中国国家运输公司，里面的一个部门主管（下属三十个职员），我感到一个美国的学历将成为我的金手指让我丰富的经验点石成金。拿着宾大的学历回到中国我定能成功地开拓我自己的事业。这是为什么我愿意花这么多钱的唯一原因。三万八千美元对于我和我的全家确实是一笔大钱，但是，比起学历之后的"钱途（Money future）"这笔投资只是一个小小的定金！穷也好，富也好，我反正有这笔钱在手上，并我想把它投下去！

4· 为什么我不厌其烦地为这一切奋斗？作为中国国家运输公司的一个部门经理，我的日子过的相当不错：享有自己的住房，公车（car privilege）,以及其他各种公司福利。

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