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范例19.1 提要

申请者概况

航天工程师，女，自费一万五千美元，父亲为担保人，去美国读信息和图书馆科学硕士

拒签理由

资金问题，具体理由为父亲作为政府工作人员，不可能有足够的资金

申诉重点

强调担保人父亲作为航天专家，而非政府官员的地位，的成就和专利收入强调自己不学航天，改学图书馆信息的目的是为了回国有一个更好的前途，并举例说明这个专业如何挣钱（具体化）


范例19.2 原文

Dear Visa Officer ,

The launch to land me an American Master’s degree in Information & Computer Science was failed because a visa officer rejected my F1 visa application. The reason: my father, a leading designer in China’s space program, “can not possibly have enough money to support me because he is working for government,” as indicated by the officer at my interview.

There are many reasons leading to a reasonable rejection to a visa application, however, the refusal to my visa on the above ground is not logical.

My father, Mr. Zhang Yongqiang, is the chief designer for the China Satellite at China Academy of Space Technology, China’s equivalent of NASA. Because of his status and reputation, he has traveled the world extensively including three times to the United States and many times to Europe and Australia. While it is true that my father does not receive a salary as high as that of his NASA colleagues, it is quite wrong to assume that people in his status in today’s China can not provide $15,000 for his daughter’s better future. Remember that my father is a very highly achieved space engineer who has a number of technological inventions. He has made very decent money from the proceeds from his inventions and one patent alone which is an energy saving device used in civil aviation vehicles has been bringing him in about 30,000USD every year during the last three years. Ignorance is prejudice. You should have listened to my explanation as why and how my father has so much money, rather than just throw my application out just because of your very limited knowledge about how and why Chinese intellectuals like my father became rich in the 90s.

The program I am going to study is Information & Library Science, which applies the computer technology to library industry. My decision to combine my computer background with this program, rather than sticking on computer and space technology, did not come without very careful and sometimes painful deliberation. A satellite designer’s daughter, and a computer specialist also working in China’s space program, it is natural and traditional for me to pick my father’s business. However, I opted to study a more consumer-oriented discipline for the mere reason that the degree for information and library science will put me in an amazing position to make great money and build great business back into China.

Busy dealing with visa applicants all the time, you may not know what is going on in this business of my choice: one of my friends already made a fortune by contracting Libraries storing old magazines and newspapers into CD ROM. Another friend of mine is also doing a booming business in putting Beijing Library on-line, which is busily under construction. These people’s success is the driving force that set me off to my goal for this degree in Information & Library Science. My father’s money invested in graduate education is a good investment decision, which expects high returns from China’s booming information industry.

It is exactly for the above reason that I did not even bother to apply for space technology programs in which I have better opportunities to land a much better scholarship because of my father’s connections and my straight credit in the field. I did not bother to apply also because: I wanted and my father supported that I should pursue a program that has the best possible money future. Please do not block my road to personal prosperity by rejecting my visa again. You should reject my visa if I am with a space technology program (which will lead to a definite conclusion that the person would try to find a job in the United States because of the sharp money prospect between returning and staying), but you should grant me a visa because of the obvious motivation behind my program for an Information & Library Science Master’s degree.

I trust that you will give my application a kind and positive review.

Thank you very much.

Sincerely,

范例19.3 翻译

尊敬的签证官：

我的飞向美国信息和电脑硕士的发射遭到失败， 是因为一位签证官对我的F2签证的拒绝。其理由：我的父亲，中国载人空间站的一位主要设计师：“作为政府工作人员，他不可能有足够的资金来资助我”， 这是面试时签证官的观点。

有许多理由可以导致一个申请者合理地被拒签，但是，以上述理由对我的拒签确实是不符合逻辑的。

我的父亲，张永强先生，是中国载人空间站的首席设计师，就职于中国空间技术总公司这个相当与美国NASA的机构。由于他的地位和声誉，他的足迹遍及全世界，包括去过三次美国，许多次欧洲和澳洲。我父亲的工资也许没有他NASA的那些同行高，但是如果认为象他这种成就的人在今日的中国连一万五千美元也拿不出来给他的女儿一个好的前途的话，那就相当错了。 请记住，我爸爸是一个非常有成就的空间工程师，自己拥有一系列技术发明。他通过这些发明的收益赚了相当多的钱，仅仅一个用于民用航空的节能装置就给他在过去的三年中带来了每年三万多美元的专利费用。漠视其实就是偏见。你本来应该聆听我对我父亲如何获得这些金钱的解释，而不是仅仅根据你极为有限的对于中国知识分子如何在九十年代发财至富的知识就把我的申请扔了出来。

我要去美国学的研究生课程，是信息和图书馆科学，这是一个把计算机技术应用于图书馆行业的学科。我之所以决定把我的计算机背景和这个科目结合，而不是停留在计算机和空间技术领域，并非没有经过仔细的甚至常常是痛苦的考虑。作为卫星设计师的女儿，自己也在中国空间项目工作的计算机专家，如果我继续从事我父亲的事业话，是很自然和很传统的决定。但是，我选择了一个更加和消费大众接近的专业，唯一的理由是因为信息和图书馆科学的硕士学位将使我处于一个惊人的有利地位回中国后建立自己的事业并赚大钱。

成天忙于和签证申请者打交道，你可能不知道我选择的这个领域是多么有前途：我的一个朋友通过为图书馆把旧期刊和报纸储存到CD-ROM上去，已经发了财。我的另一个朋友正在忙于帮助北京图书馆上网，生意兴旺得火爆。这些朋友的成功是驱使我追求信息与图书馆科学学业的动力。我的父亲用于我的研究生教育的资金是一个非常好的投资决定，因为这可以从中国日益繁荣的信息产业中得到高额回报。上述理由就是我之所以没有麻烦去申请空间技术学位的原因。如果我申请的话，由于父亲的关系以及我本人的专业成绩，我得到一个奖学金的机会一定要大得多。我没有申请的原因还有：我希望并且得到我父亲的支持，从事一种有着最好的经济前景的学科。请求你不要再次拒绝我的申请从而阻挡我通往个人成功之路。如果我选择的是空间技术的话，你倒是应该拒签我（因为基于巨大的经济上的差别，可以肯定这个人将试图在美国找一份工作并滞留不归），而你实在应该给我一个签证，因为我在选择信息和图书馆科学硕士学位背后的这个显而易见的（回国发展事业的）动机。

我相信你会给我的申请一个善良和优惠的审批。

非常感谢

忠诚的，

　

范例19.4 分析

张月的爸爸是著名的航天专家。她自己也是学航天的并且已经工作了三四年。张月的面试失败在：当签证官对她父亲的经济能力发起攻击的时候：“你爸爸作为政府官员，不可能有这么多钱来支持你！”，她没有能够以绝对的自信把这个攻击给顶回去。张月应该怎么“顶”回签证官的进攻（Challenge）？

自信来自于真实。如果签证官说：你爸爸只是一个政府官员，根本不懂航空！这时张月会怎么想？　她内心一定会受到严重侮辱，她会用女儿全部的爱和恨在心里说：放你妈的屁！我爸爸可伟大了。然后却把笑容写在脸上对着签证官说：你错了，尊敬的先生，我爸爸不仅是中国著名的专家，他是你们国家NASA的荣誉顾问呢！这会使签证官当场表示内疚并立即给这个专家的女儿一个签证。

那么，根据同样的道理，张月的爸爸有一万五千美元这个事实，应该和她的爸爸是一个真正的并非冒牌的航天专家一样，是一个不容质疑的铁案。张月对于这个问题的反应，在本质上应该和上面虚拟的问题一样，是强烈的抗议和绝对的自信。我在咨询的过程中，确实碰到了这样的学生，对自己“有钱”这个感觉，就和“我是我爸爸的孩子”一样具有条件反射般的捍卫意识。

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